The bike lays on a tree
The frame is covered in dead grass
Is handle bars have an angel to give the bike hope
The light sparkles at night
The tyres are like flat combind marks in the mud
The seat bounced like kids on a bouncy castle
The brakes are as rusty as an old tractor
The cobweb shines like a star
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I like the frame is covered in grass.
Maybe describe more about the bike frame. And what condition is the bike in?
I love it. Specially the simile at the end.
What kind of a tree was the bike laying on?
Maybe you could write about the surroundings.
I love it. Specially the simile at the end.
What kind of a tree was the bike laying on?
Maybe you could write about the surroundings.
1 I like the frame is covered in dead grass,
2 what make of tree is it beach oak tell me what type it is,
3 for a improvement tell me what type of light bright dim gloomy
the way you put the light sparkles in the night real caught our eyes
how did you get all those amazing ideas?
you could change the bike was as rusty as an old tractor to as rusty as an old gutter in the rain
i like the last one
1. Good job!
2. Where did you get the amazing ideas?
3.Could you change some adjectives to describe it more?