As the rusty antique bike lent on the tree
The dog walked past and had a pee
not caring what nature thinks
the bike mind swirling back into the past remembering when the rang the bell bing bing
ridding the bike around the park
They were good times in the park
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Its good but you say pig a lot try to use some other words. Also try to shorten those sentences.
We like how you described the bike in the first line.Could you use more adjectives in the poem? You could use more full stops and capital letters.
#1 I like how you making it descriptive but in small sentences
#2 How did you come up with these ideas?
#3 Try make it a bit longer