πππ πππππ’ ππππ – π°ππ πΉππ’ – πππ
πΈ π πππππ ππ πππ’ ππ’ πππππ’ πππ ππππ ππππ π πππ πππ ππ’ ππππππππ’,
ππ πΈ π πππ ππ πππ ππππ πππ πππππππ ππ’ ππππ πππππ’, πππ ππππ.
πΈ ππππππππ ππ πππππ ππ πππππ’ ππ ππ’ πππ πππ,
πππ πππ ππ π ππ ππ πππ ππππππ πππππππππ.
πΈπ π ππ ππ πππππ’ ππ π πππππππππ,
π πππ πππ π’ ππππ πππ ππ πππ πππππ’ ππππππ ππππ.
πππ ππππ, πππππ πππππ π πππ ππππ,
πππ πππ ππππ π ππ ππππππππ.
π½ππ ππ ππ ππππ ππππ πΈ ππππ π πππππ’ πππ ππππ.
Hello I love your poem itβs great
thats really good loved it
This is a great peom!
1) Love the poem itself very descriptive and tells you lots about the bike
2) Where did you get the ideas from?
3) The first two sentences are irrelevant
I really like this poem but there are a few punctuation mistakes, but other than that it is great!
Hi,
Well done I like when you said I wanted to try my new bike and the reset number one- maybe donβt put that many i in there because there is a lot of I in there but I love it though well done.
Good simile and good vocabulary.
How old is the bike?
Maybe add a metaphor or simile for the shinny bike.
Thank you for all the lovely comments! I will look at how I can improve next time thank you for all the improvements β°
Hello I really like your post you have got great vocabulary well done.
Hi Ava I like it how you used π πππ πππ π’ ππππ πππ ππ πππ πππππ’ ππππππ ππππ, but add a capital letter to With otherwise your poem is amazing.