The seasons – Liam N and Morgan
Cold breeze follows all,
Tree snow collapses on the ground,
Loud carols echo.
Red boiling heat stays,
Cold ice cream vans sings a song,
Grass tickles laid people.
Blossom buds expand,
Pollen spreads around the grass
Cold breeze follows all,
Tree snow collapses on the ground,
Loud carols echo.
Red boiling heat stays,
Cold ice cream vans sings a song,
Grass tickles laid people.
Blossom buds expand,
Pollen spreads around the grass
I really like how you’ve used the essence of winter in your poem. I’d love to hear more.
1.I really like how you have put grass tickles laid people.
2.What does grass tickles laid people?
3.I think you should improve you’re remembering for full stops.