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The seasons by ZaraP TJS

Waves crash on the shore,
People eat yummy ice cream,
Very happy dreams,
We all build snowmen,
Chicken dinner all around,
Snowflakes on my nose,
Birds start to sing,
Baby lambs come out to play,
We all sing hooray,
It’s getting colder,
The song starts to die away,
Leaves crunch under me,
Christmas pudding yay,
We all wear coats to keep warm,
White snow falls today.

6 Responses to “The seasons by ZaraP TJS”

  1. Reply
    Ellie sww y5 October 21, 2020 at 11:43 am

    I loved it when you said people eat ice cream I love ice cream !
    Do you like christmas pudding? I don`t it has alcohol in
    Instead of people eat ice cream I think you should put people love Ice cream .

  2. Reply
    Zoe SWW October 21, 2020 at 11:46 am

    Hi Zara well done you did a really great job.
    1. I love how you put the song starts to die away
    2. Did the seasons spring, summer, autumn and winter inspire you.
    3. Like Pie Corbett says maybe try name the birds.

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    Anonymous October 21, 2020 at 1:20 pm

    1) I liked it when you said The song starts to die away
    2) Do waves crash I don’t know but I think you should put something else
    3) I like it loads

  4. Reply
    Norris Nuts Are Ew November 17, 2020 at 8:50 am

    Hi Zara nice poem there is nothing bad about your poem and you are a great author.

  5. Reply
    Tsunami November 19, 2020 at 9:37 am

    Norris nuts I do agree that the poem is good I just think that she could use better vocabulary, you didn’t have to rhyme it, that would be a way of having better vocabulary

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