The Man by Freya@Emporium
The storm howled in the misty sky. Screaming in the house below, graveyards shook. My heart beat quickened. I shuddered. Who was that?
Far away I noticed a figure coming towards me. Whoever it was they carried a parcel. They shuffled across the path keeping their distance from others not wanting to be seen. An eye flickered, I could not believe my eyes, it was him! The man with the long black coat, who I’d seen yesterday.
1 can you add more adgetives
2 good punctuation
3good story about a scary man
1.Explain the the weather better.
2.Talk more of the house.