skyship poem
As Josh gazed over the deck of the skyship, he already felt bored because nothing had really happened since they left the city behind a week ago. He glanced at his twin sister Mariana who actually enjoyed every second of it. What Josh wanted was action and for something to happen. They were meant to be passing over the lowlands but the storm had blown them off course.
Out of the blue, Josh’s dragon started roaring really loudly which he only did when trouble was coming. They suddenly spotted a massive sky monster which could’ve been big enough to swallow the whole ship but they were very rare. As it started coming towards the ship, they realised they would have to use their enchanted crossbows for it. The crew managed to shoot it down as it was banging into the ship. When it banged into the ship, it had sent the ship plummeting downwards and caused it to lose control.
“We have to crash land!” shouted Josh.
“Are you crazy?” Mariana screamed as they ran around the ship. “Okay then i will steer it” she shouted over the top of her voice as the ship approached the ground very quickly.
well done
Well done this is amazing. I like your vocabulary.
I like how you have described Marianna’s reaction and how brave the characters are.
This is very good how you described him how he was gazing and i liked when you put in when Josh’s dragon started roaring really loudly which he only did when trouble was coming . I could feel that it made me think whats going to happen . The crew managed to shoot it down as it was banging into the ship. When the crew shot it down it would be even better if you could have described it with even more detail but still the story is VERY GOOD.
Great. It would be even more better if you remember your capital letters.
Well done this is great i really like the use of vocab.
Well done this is amazing! Most of the adjectives are great like glanced, Out of the blue and roaring were the best.
I really like it but just remember your capital letters
I really like your vocabulary use in your poem! Next time remember to use capital letters.