Opening skyship

At that moment Fingulger​ gripped the icy, cold frame of the skyrider as it dipped into the eye of the storm (where the dragons lay).
His loyal companions (Neao, Hertshe and Zugla) transfixed all of there attention against the dark dragons. Suddenly all of the dragons shot there purple energy balls at the ships balloon. Finguler steered the skyrider out of the path of the energy balls, but then he came in contact with the dragons claws and they all plummeted towards the earth.

One Response to “Opening skyship”

  1. Brilliant! I love the drama and the description. I also really like your use of brackets. Just be careful with which type of ‘there’ you use. Think about whether it should be ‘their’ ‘there’ or ‘they’re’.

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