As captain O’shea stood alone on deck peeping over the edge ty heard something it was a creepy noise it was comeing from the bed room she ran into there she did not see anything there was a beast she tried to get out but the door was locked what happened to her.
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Good story, I especially like the bit at the end where the door slammed and you couldn’t get out. I also think you could improve it by adding some more adjectives. Was the beast invisible or did it have wind powers?
I like your story because the door locked and no one knows what happened to her.