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I would bring a camera, that is waterproof, to take pictures and videos to keep as a memory.
I would bring a ninja hamster, that is midnight blue, to listen into people conversations and keep me company.
I would take a jar of jam, strawberry jam, that can stick dragon’s jaws together so they won’t attack.
I would take umbrella, one that can fly, to keep e alive if the ship crashes or I fall of something tall.
I would take a navigator, that uses the sun to charge, so I don’t get lost.
I would take an everlasting sweet supply ( that includes sour watermelons) because you can’t live without sweets.
Hey!
Really nice work you have done!
Where did you get the first line idea from?
Check your 4th line because there is a loose e in there!
Keep up the good work!
This has good ideas, but you missed words and letters that make it not make sense, such as in the sentence to “listen into people conversations and keep me company.” You put to listen to people conversations when it should have been people’s conversations. Other than that, this is a good piece of work
1.You have some really good ideas like:I would take an everlasting sweet supply ( that includes sour watermelons) because you can’t live without sweets.
2.Why would you bring a ninja hamster to listen to people’s conversations and keep yourself company.
3.Read over your work to check for mistakes.
i really like this but i think you need some more strong adjectives. keep up the good work!