Mountain Sailor by Ava
Mountain sailer
Episode 1
Tony leaned over the deck meanwhile his sister Lamia was talking to captain.Kelly “I don’t like heights!” Shouted Lamia “oh you’ll be fine”replied captain.Kelly ,suddenly a dragon emerged form the storm clouds as its scales whisked past the ship leaving a massive hole.The emergency landing was called as they drifted down in a abandoned city “omg…” muttered Lamia.The children had been told to stay on the ship so they did.
Episode 2
The crew went out to search for handy supplies ,There layed buildings surrounding Them,there they waited around The ominous dark building’s “Lamia?” Said Tony “Yes”replied Lamia “are you ok?”said Tony “kinda” ,massive building’s towered over ,suddenly They heard something.
Episode 3
They heard something crawling up the ship it looked very scary but it was a baby lemon dragon dragon hurt it looked like it got hurt in the storm.Lamia pulled up the dragon treated its wounds and got it in a blanket.
Episode 4
Several hours later,the crew got back from getting supplies and was very happy the children stayed on the ship and well behaved which was good The children had different feelings Lamia was glad to be up in the air and Tony really missed home the children were instantly sent to bed.
I really like all of it but my favourite paragraph was episode 3 and why is the captain Kelly and also I spotted a few spelling mistakes in some of the paragraphs.
Thank you for the feedback I will make sure to always check my work before I post it.