All the things that I love by Emily
The treasure that I would take:
I would take my family,
So that we can make memories that would last a life time, have fun and laugh.
Doggie and all my other favourite Teddy’s,
So that I can play with them and have fun.
My violin and guitar,
So that I could make some music that is nice and is relaxing.
Spaghetti bolognese,
So that I can eat my favourite food and enjoy it.
Books,
So that I can read when I have nothing else to do or to help me get to sleep.
All of my squishville colection,
So that I can play with them and squish.
My polaroid camera,
So I remember all of the memories and I can also see them again on paper/ screen/ camera.
I would take my signed sprout,
To remember the day I got it and to remember the time I got it signed by the maker.
THE END…..
This is very good, maybe try to include more magical ideas; e.g. the delicate glimmering horn from the darkest unicorn.
I think you did good but I think you can inproove be putting more spaisise