The Frosty Emporium
The Frosty Emporium
There are place that some people have went and some haven’t, but at The Frosty Emporium no one absolutely NO ONE has been in there before. Nobody dares to go into the it because it is freezing and you will die of coldness, that’s how cold it is. There is rumors that there is a witch in there a she kills who ever she sees.
Chapter 1
The Frosty Emporium
Tommy, who had a day of because it was bank holidays, wanted to have the most fun he had on a Monday so he can be happy for school on Tuesday. So he decided that he was going to go on a walk with his friends. They had told him about the emporium before so they told him again but the is they wanted to go to the emporium but Tommy thought it was a bad idea. Even though he kept on saying that they shouldn’t go they didn’t listen. He was frustrated that they didn’t listen but he was the oldest in the group so he wanted to keep them safe. When they arrived they all was regretting their dissection but they were already in the front yard so they was no going back now.
That is a very nice piece of writing. On your first paragraph I think you dont need to put capital letters on no one. Where did you get your title from?