Chapter 3 and 4
Chapter 3 and chapter 4
Leon was walking through the forest when he felt a warm feeling down his body and when he looked up he saw a ruby door shimmering in the sun. He heard a voice in his head saying do not enter but he ignored the voice and entered the house but then he heard a voice that he had never heard a voice so close and when he turned around he saw a witch standing behind him. Leon ran and tried to escape but the door that he came through had gone and the witch said to him there is no escape and you are now stuck with me now but then someone kicked the door down and saved Leon but the witch tried to grab them but was not able to get them. Leon safely mad it back to the shop. When they got back to the shop mike to Leon not to write in the book again but he did not listen and he went back to the forest because he saw a golden pen that belongs to the shop Leon must of dropped it when he was in the forest. This golden pen belongs to who is the owner of the shop.
i like where you wrote “Leo felt some thing warm down his body”.
what do you like about it?
really good
i think you should change the character a bit maybe to a monster or a human came out of nowhere.
i like your story but the change on name.
I like it because it made me feel like I am entering that house.