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New Year’s Eve

I want to paint the warmth of fizzing fireworks,

I want to paint the sweet aroma of fresh fabulous hot chocolate,

I want to paint the sensational drama of New Years Eve,

I want to paint the day when I bring home my own pen licence,

I want to paint the serine ocean glimmering in the day.

11 Responses to “New Year’s Eve”

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    jack October 4, 2021 at 12:20 pm

    I like your sentences but i think you could add more sentences

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    Ruby-Forest Academy October 4, 2021 at 12:21 pm

    Its a really lovely poem in my opinion I love you put the ‘Aroma of fresh fabulous hot-chocolate!’ However, I think you could improve by describing the fire woks in a different way.What gave you this idea for such spectacular poem!

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    Oliver Cobham Primary School October 15, 2021 at 10:04 am

    I love your poem it’s full of awe but I think you could say what drama happened on New Year’s eve.

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    Anonymous October 15, 2021 at 10:07 am

    Nice sahib I like the hot chocolate one!

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    Anonymous October 15, 2021 at 10:08 am

    Well done loved it!!!

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    Anonymous October 15, 2021 at 10:09 am

    Hello I like but I think you should add more.

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    Ellie Cobham Primary School October 15, 2021 at 10:09 am

    Amazing work Inde

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    Kieran October 15, 2021 at 10:10 am

    I really liked this poem

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    Anonymous October 15, 2021 at 10:11 am

    Nice job got you mixed up sorry!!

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    Anonymous October 15, 2021 at 10:14 am

    It’s a amazing but next time try and add more sentences

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