The ninja roses petals are dark and inky they fade away in the brightness hiding its true colours , its roots dig into the ground like a drill there short and static alerted by the slight movement. It’s stem is like no other it stretches out like an elastic band into any shape imaginable.
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I like the idea that the stem can bend into any shape, Why does the petals colour fade away in the brightness, I think you could improve by breaking down the paragraph.
I like the idea of a ‘ninja rose’
How does the stem stretch into any shape?
I think you could improve it by putting a simile for the colour of its petals such as, as black as the night sky.
I like the idea of a ‘ninja rose’
How can it’s stem go into any shape?
You could add a simile about the colour of its petals such as, as black as the night sky.