Unicorn has been spotted
Early this morning when Courtney’s dad was leaving the house, he spotted a unicorn eating his tomato’s
The unicorn was in her back garden witch is in Brandon. It was a dark grey unicorn with black fur on its head.The unicorn was shoving tomato’s in its mouth.Her dad did not like the unicorn.
They dark grey unicorn was standing on the small green plants. Courtney’s dad said “That unicorn is going!”Her brother wanted to keep it.The neighbours were complaining because it made to much noise so they didn’t like it either.
The unicorn had already eaten the long cucumbers and strawberry’s. It was now eating tomato’s one by one. Police are looking around the area and are saying if you spot a unicorn report it right away and leave it alone because nobody knows if it is dangerous or not.
I like the description you have used.
I like how you have described the unicorn but can you try to make your sentences more exciting?
This piece of writing is really good, I liked how you put the unicorn had already eaten all long cucumbers and strawberry’s but I think that you need to use a few more adjectives.
You have written an interesting piece of writing. I like the fact you have used speech.Could you change some of your openers?
I like how you described what the Unicorn was standing on. what else were the neighbours complain about the unicorn? In the first sentence could you describe the unicorn.
This is an amazing peas of work well done 👏