A simple request
It could be the chirping of a young robin at the
top of and old oak tree near Astley park or the
rustling of a hedgehog scuttling through a big
bushy hedge or the noise of a cat roaming
the long grassy fields while it was away from
the house.
It could be the noise of children’s running around
the park or it could be the barking of a dog running
after the children as they run around in excitement.
It could be the sound of children playing games in
the school playground or noisy cars making there
way down the long busy road.
It could be of pans banging while someone was
making their dinner or the clatter of things being
dropped on the floor or the talking of a child playing
games with their toys.
I loved it. This was one of the best ever.maybe next time make it way more detailed because you have a really good imagination. That is what the poem makes me feel about you when I read it. Well Done!!
I like how you used the places near you.
How could you make a new paragraph easier to spot?
When you wrote, “…or noisy cars making making there way down the long busy road.” You needed to use “their” not “there” and you needed to use a comma to separate long and busy.