Rabbit , rabbit
How do you live in
the world for 12 years and
make us devastated for years ?
Rabbit , rabbit
Why eat carrots but
Eat all the cabbage at night?
Rabbit, rabbit
How are you all natural recyclers
When you roam and eat all the crops in the field ?
Rabbit ,rabbit
How do you have the same
name as a deer that is a female ?
Rabbit, rabbit
How do you see us though
your beady eyes and not attack us
were watching you cabbage monster.
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Hi Zara! I like how you made the rabbit seem like a mischievous character in your poem. The line “How do you live in the world for 12 years and make us devastated for years?” is a great way to show the reader the impact the rabbit has on the speaker’s life.
To improve, I think it might be helpful to describe the rabbit’s behavior in more detail. For example, you could describe how the rabbit hops through fields, how it nibbles on plants, and how it burrows underground.
A question for you would be: What inspired you to write about rabbits and their impact on crops?