4 Responses to “Smooth melted chocolate”

  1. Well done Oliver! I really like the bit where it says ‘you are the smell of roses that bees are extracting.’
    Do you think you could name where the final round of kick boxing is?e.g:in a country like France
    Do you think you could add more detail to the chocolate bubbling
    I love this poem

  2. Chocolate is tasty

  3. What does kickboxing have to do with chocolate and roses you don’t eat roses also exhausts DO NOT smell it is the petrol that smells and it smells noice

  4. Yes I love choclate I love your description perhaps some similes would make it better

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