Baby animals,
Blossom trees sway gracefully
Sweet fresh fruits, yummy.
Children laughing nice,
Smelly smoothies taste so good.
Salty air, yucky.
Pumpkin pie is great,
Orange leaves crunch beneath me
Aroma of hot soup smells.
Mistletoe hangs down,
Fires crackle in cold air
Ball baubles swing on fir.
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I love your poem I especially like the part were you say “blossom trees sway”. Could you improve some of your adjectives though like you could describe the mistletoe toe?
good job !
1 I love the use of describing the scents and smells.
2. Could you tighten it up a bit so it goes 5 7 5?
3. Check for good flow so it sounds more ambitious.