Icicles dripping.
Soft snowmen melting swiftly.
Snow falling slowly.
Fire exiting houses.
Warm soup entering my stomach.
Hot chocolate being sipped.
Northern lights glowing.
Wooly scarfs being wrapped.
Crackers being tugged.
Mince pies being devoured.
Children playing joyfully.
Santa flying around earth.
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I like how you use snowmen and how they melt.
How do they melt swiftly ?
You could use a different word instead of swiftly
I like the kids playing joyfully.
I liked woolly scarfs being wrapped.
Even better if you can use another word for dripping.
You could change Santa flying around the earth to Santa gliding around the earth but otherwise it is amazing.
Nice poem well done.
I like the poem but I think you could add more detail to it and make it more interesting good job .