Friend or Foe by ZaraP TJS
Emmy couldn’t believe it, she had won the lottery! “Dad?” Emmy( a teen who has brown hair and blue eyes) asked quietly, “So I was sort of wondering if this could go to children in need?”
“Emmy we’ve talked about this.” Dad replied in a bored voice. “Also I’ve invited Jamie to come round this afternoon.” Emmy sighed, she couldn’t think of anything more boring than playing with Jamie.
This is like the Micheal Morgo title it is really effective for the people that read the book!
Hi Zara you are a amazing writer but your punctuation needs a bit of working on (commas).
Hi Zara you are good at writing but use commas for suspense.
Hi Zara this is cracking’ good