Grasped enchantments from a sea pool,
a magical water tornado inside a mystical Jewel,
Stolen from glittering light pure and bold.
gold magic will never go it will just keep getting stronger.
Song
Unicorns will always be real forever .
when clever shiny gems are glittering in the snow
you can guarantee that unicorns are around.
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Great start Ellie 😀 you were lining up ready for a fabulous and poetic piece of writing with your descriptive words and rhyming. However in your second paragraph it feels like you haven’t paid enough attention to the rhyme and following the flow that you started so well. Try and keep that flow going, similar syllables in each sentence as set out in your first line and rhyming words throughout. I really love your first opening sentence it screams magical fantasy with rainbows and kittens 😀