Ava’s adventure by Ellie G
Ava stared through the black night.She could see her breathe as she flew over the icy depths of the artic.It was only last week that she was snuggled under her fluffy blanket with her favourite book, now she was on an adventure that would stay with her forever.
A loud Crash snapped her out of her daydream,Without warning,a huge dragon with eyes as black as coal swooped down and tried to grab her with its sharp pointy claws.”AHHHHHH” screamed Ava as the dragon created a pool of fire from its black hole like mouth.Polly the Parrot was startled awake by the sound of Ava’s scream, by the time Polly had reached her She seemed to of scared it off with her grandfathers spear that she had packed just incase.
Once she had steadied herself from the dragons attack she took a moment to take in the sheer beauty of the icy scenery around her ,she took a deep breath and said “Polly prepare to land, we need to do some repairs”.
I like the way you have two opposites as in the freezing artic and have compared it to the fluffy blanket.
I love your story Ellie your a good thinker and writer
Great start to a story.
I love it! Great start to the story! I love the name polly too!
I like the way you have used vocabulary to describe the place they were in.
i love it Ellie its amazing but look at your puncuation overall its very good