The landing
As the skyship gets closer to land, Amy started to really panic.
“ TY PUT UP THE MAIN SAIL! HELLO CONCONTRATE!Ugh fine I will do it!” Amy spat with annoyance.
Ty stood there in shock, paralized, frozen, and then… CRASH,THUD , BANG! The skyship landed on a colossal, abandoned crumbling colosseum.
“Wow” Amy said to herself. The skyship crashed right in the middle of it , just missing an unsteady archway.
“Ty !” Ty! TY”
Amy( completly unharmed ) ran into the wreck to find Ty curled up in a ball, with a massive gash streacking down his right leg.
“ Is is over?” Ty croaked in pain.
“Oh my god! Ty are you ok?” Amy questioned
Then, in the blink of and eye, the sun shone so bright they could barely see.
“ Come on lets get you out of here.”
She picked Ty up and carried him out of ship wreck only to see the dragons STILL folowing them!
“ TY WE NEED TO HIDE!” Amy said with panic in her voice… Amy loocked arouned but all she could see were jagged rockes and boiling sand.
Twenty minutes later, Ty opened his eyes to find him-self in a cave with a bandage on his leg.
“ we should be safe for now. The dragons have gone away.” Amy whispered trying not to be loud.
“ what are you doing here?”
“ shhh! Be quiet. This is the only place I could find.” Suddenly they heard a thud.
“ What was that? Ty whispered
“How am I meant to know.”
Then Ty saw blazing fire.
“D-dragons.”
Then they ran…
I love the use of parenthesis and the fantastic description! Be careful to keep your tense the same all the way through and watch your capital letters.