Episode 2:Sky ship landing
After 10 minutes trying to find Lucas(guy missing)all the crew-mates began to sigh and started to give up. The captain came out from the underground kitchen and started to scream “Where’s my mysterious map?!”All the crew-mates started to look confused, one crew-mate replied “Where’s my special sword!?” another exclaimed “Where’s my rusty rolling pin?!” They all started to scream “EVERYTHINGS MISSING!!!”Suddenly, Lucas came back with all the missing stuff and the crew-mates enemies. Lucas started to scream whilst the enemies we’re holding his ear. “I CAN EXPLAIN OUR ENEMIES MADE ME STEAL EVERYTHING, THERE MAKING ME JOIN THERE TEAM!”
I like how you used an alliteration for the crews “missing” stuff
All in all the story is very good and it makes me want to read Episode 3. Its got a lot of great speech but I think it needs a few more adjectives.