The skies were dull and they were snapping in the wind Leo resist landing down onto power to mount fortilla. This mountain was beautiful it was gleaming on the mountain people were sitting on the seats getting ready to ski down the mountain. All if a sudden the vile ski leopards jumped up to are ship and POW.
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1) I like that the mountain is populated unlike many.
2) Why did you choose sky leopards?
3) To make this even better, you could add some short sentences for suspense.