The airship landing
As we approached the airship, we was expecting a luxurious airship, instead we got a plain old sky ship. We step onto the airship with disgust. “ I hate height” Kai announced, As we step onto the ship. We started to fly. As we reach the sky Jacob, Leon and Kai were amazed by the incredible view of the sky. 3 hours later something bad happened the ship was out of control, we all shivered with fear. “ what are we gonna do “ Jacob asked. Suddenly the pilot jump out with all the parachute behind him. We had no clue where we was heading, we had to jump but Leon was liking this, he was crazy. Jacob jumped into the front and try lead us away, he made everything worse. We landed straight into a desert, “ where are we , I’m boiling.As we looked around the only thing we can see is sand. We all fell to the ground and saw a rampage of viscous heading towards us.
I love the description and I love how you described everything and I think you could maybe add instead of the names of all the people you could do the group or something like that.