The Only Survivor On Sky Ship SWW India
The Survivor On Sky Ship
“112 this is 112 we are about to crash into the amazon forest “shouted the Captain
Ten minutes after the crash, with blood dripping from my head one by one. I slowly and steadily went out of the sky ship and I was the only survivor lost in the amazon forest. Suddenly, I fainted in a blink of an eye I fell to the ground…..
When I woke up the sky ship was up in flames the only thing that survivor was one back pack with a pen knife, water, clothing ,a rope and a blanket. I can not stop thinking of what the Captain said before we crashed what does 112 mean and why did he say it ???
It felt like I was working for hours and hours when it has just been 5 minutes, I do not know what I was doing because I’m used ton people doing every thing for me or my cat Derick. But I did watch an episode of how to live in a forest.
Suddenly, I herd a sound of a RRRRR ” I think he can small my blood” whispered India……..
Well done I liked all of the discription that you added but my favorite part was the bit where you said your blood whisperd india I think you could of added some punctuation such as exlamation marks well done.
Hi, I love this piece of writing…There are some mistankes on you puntuation but other than that its really good.
1. That was really good we loved even though it was short. We liked the suspense that you built and you should’ve wrote more.
2. Did you get any inspiration from anything that made you think of this because it is so good?
3. On your first set of speech you didn’t put a punctuation mark!
1 I like that you have put a elipse and you leveing us on a cliffhanger at the end
2 I think you could change all the elipse there is gust a lot.
3 you would never put three queston mark together but good story
Well done India, I like the bit wear you fainted an dropped to the ground in a blink of a eye. I agree with Anonymous you could add a bit of punctuation, but apart from that it is really good.
thank you and if you what want to read it i just posted part 2 when it is out you my read it thank you.
if you what like to read it you can part two is out