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3 Responses to “The rare lion”

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    Finley welch June 28, 2021 at 10:44 am

    1.I like the way you put Big blue eyes not just blue eyes.
    2.Was it supposed to be 10 million cubs (lion ones)?
    3.To make a improvement add more description about the lions, eg. what they eat, what they do when bored, how they hunt…

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    aubrey hybes June 28, 2021 at 10:45 am

    1.This is good
    2. Why do the females have fox cuds
    3. I would change the fox cuds to blue

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    Frankie June 28, 2021 at 11:42 am

    Well done maybe you got a bit muddled up because you are speaking about a lion not a fox…Also, maybe check your writing there are a few mistakes like a ellipses is meant to have 3 dots not 2. Other than that this good.

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