Layla.Rose and Amelia.P
This amazing creature, which is called the Octomander is an Octopus just twice the size of a Megalodon. You will likely find it in the Antarctic seas because of its glorious scales underneath the icy blockage.
Surprisingly, the Octomander has 20 glowing tentacles that store it’s blue ink inside. Remember if you see an Octomander don’t look it in the eyes and RUN. If you look it in the eyes it will ink you in the face and will have a chance to eat you in 2.3 seconds.
Almost all people believe it’s vegetarian but it eats arctic animals and humans.This fabulous Octopus lives in the northSouth Pole and migrates the east pole in the Summer.
That made me want to learn about the Octomander.Why do people think it’s vegetarian?you could explain more about its personality.
I like the name octomander .
For the title, you could improve to write the actual malamanders name
Why did you call it the octomander.
You could of added a bit more like what do they eat?
Over all it had some powerful word so I give it 4.5 out of 5.
I like this because it gives me a lot of ideas of what to do if I ever come across an Octomander. If the artic is always in the season winter how does it hibernate in the summer? Maybe you can look back next time after a sentence to make sure it makes sense.
I like how you added detail,What did you mean when you put it lives in the NorthSouth pole?You could add more detail to what it eats.Other than that it was really good.