Is this the end…
03 – 07 – 22
After one week the ship was finally repaired and could fly and the crew packed up after another 5 minutes. While the ship took off to the sky they heard a screech much louder than the baby dragon, what echo all over the city. Although the crew didn’t think anything of it there was 2 who did the baby dragon and Ty and while the others were having a bit of a party the boy was hoping that it was not the dragons mum / dad. Later that same day Ty was going into the library, but when he turned his head he saw a mysterious pure black beady eye that then hid in the deaths of the dark.
Suddenly! Ty woke up as lightning bolted down to the ground, just missing the ship. Snow that then pilled on the ship / deck encasing us in away from society, before rain surrounded me after I closed the door feeling alone and in a tight little place. After the rain cleared I could see the same eye peering around an open door but this time it was the other eye what was pure white. After 1 day when the crew was settling, the baby dragon was acting much stranger than before. But! This time the dragon didn’t hide but it did come out and revel itself to everyone while the baby dragon also the dragon’s kid was flying to its parent.
Can I just say this is the best story I’ve read so far, it’s just brilliant and really enjoyable to read, I hope my comment gave you motivation to write even more. What I loved most about is definitely the use of punctuation to add more description. My only suggestion for next time is maybe re-read it to make sure there is no suspense. I hope this comment helped you!
*no mistakes (sorry for the spelling error haha)