the mystery eye
When the crew got back they climbed on the air ship and set off. It was around 10 P.M when they all finally fell sleep. Suddenly, there was a deafening sound from outside the ship, a long echoing scratching noise scraped down the outside of the ship.
Ty leapt out of bed and went to the window but could not see anything. He ran to his room to get a flashlight. Then he looked with the flashlight and then saw… a scarlet blue eye and it looked like the baby dragons eye and guess WHAT IT WAS!
The suspense in this is AMAZING, I thought it was brilliant but maybe next time try use less “then and then” by starting a new sentence to describe something else or use a different format of layout!