The poem By Frank SWW
You are the burnt wood,
crackling to pieces,
disintegrating to ash,
reuniting other new beginnings.
You are the dark ink,
spreading across the ignorant paper.
You are the soul of the deep blue,
spreading life were ever it travels.
You are a emotional Monkey,
screaming and screeching.
You are the bright flames of fire,
destroying anything in its path,
paralyzing things it can grasp.
By Frank
You are the burnt wood,
crackling to pieces,
disintegrating to ash,
reuniting other new beginnings.
You are the dark ink,
spreading across the ignorant paper.
You are the soul of the deep blue,
spreading life were ever it travels.
You are a emotional Monkey,
screaming and screeching.
You are the bright flames of fire,
destroying anything in its path,
paralyzing things it can grasp.
By Frank
1.I like that it was very descriptive.
2.Do you think you could check it over?
3.Could you maybe include a different opening phrase for the last one since you have used the same phrase twice.
I love the word disintegrated. Can paper be ignorant? Maybe describe the ink a bit more.
I like the fire bit at the end where it grasps because of the vocabulary. Great. Well done!
1. Great poem Frank. I like the idea about ‘reuniting other new beginnings’ – I’ve never seen that before.
2. Can you add more as these are so good?
3. I’d suggest changing the repetition of ‘spreading’.
I like the last paragraph.
Why did you use an emotional monkey
Could you use more adjectives to paint a picture
You are an amazing righter and i love your 4th poem ‘You are an emotional monkey screaming and screeching’. You could change the word screeching. Keep up the good work
Hi this is great! I love how you used the word ‘disintegrating’. Great use of adjectives as well.
Frank I love the combination of the 2 ideas of disintegrating and reuniting. From destructions comes new beginnings.