the Skyship
The skyship glided through the air as they sailed to the destination. Many of the crew were busy and wanted to land for a break they’d been flying for sixteen hours but the captain knew that if they landed the dragons would soon find them .
All of a sudden a titanic sized dragon swooped past the ship it must have had a wing span of twenty metres the captain told the gunners to open fire lightning bolts were shot from the dragons while the crew fired bullets. The engine was hit by the dragons lightning bolt the captain new they were going down.
The crew heard a scream she’s going down the crew braced themselves and got ready for a rough landing. The driver was wrestling with the controls but he new there was no point the ship dropped dramatically it was over . They had crash landed .
I liked the dramatic language, it made me feel like I want to know more! Perhaps use an exclamation mark at the end of the chapter? I suggest you should check over your punctuation.
I like your vocabulary. Maybe you should put an elipsis at the end to build tension?