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My You Are Poem

You are a train track which chatters all day long like mums at the hairdressers.

You are sneaky slithery snake which runs all day long like a cheeky cheater.

You are a stunning sun which moves all the time like a slow motion movie.

You are a jumping kangaroo that hops as high as a plane.

 

11 Responses to “My You Are Poem”

  1. I really love it

  2. I loved the part where you write you are a stunning sun which move’s all the time in a slow motion movie.

  3. I love the sentence “You are a jumping kangaroo that hops as high as a plane” Well done!

  4. I really like the way you said a kangaroo jumping high as a plane.

  5. I Love how you described the sun and snake
    Well done

  6. I like the way you said stunning sun which moves all the time like a slow-mo movie

  7. Hello,
    1.Well done i really love this poem. I love the sentence “You are the train track which chatters all day long like your mums at the hair dressers.
    2.Do you do poetry often.
    3. Next time maybe remember comas after ” Sneaky, slithery snake.”

  8. 1. Great similes
    2. Is your mum a chatterbox?
    3. Can you add in some more commas.
    Great work well done!

  9. Why is there a snake?

  10. I like the sentence you are a train track which chatters.
    Did you enjoy writing the poem?
    Would the last sentence be improved if you named the plane?

  11. The first sentence is amazing.
    How tall is the kangaroo?
    Next time start with a different starter.

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