Sky-ship
Sky ship,
Can you believe me and my sister got asked to go on a sky-ship,
I can’t. Later that day we jumped onto the sky-ship looking very excited.
When we were on the sky-ship my sister took a photo and she said cheese.
I did not want to tell her that nobody says cheese anymore because it would ruin the moment.
Anyway the sky-ship was massive, it could probably fit 16 people my sister said it was tiny
Compared to our house. I told her to be grateful but she just walked away.
A few hours later, I spotted something you would never believe… Wanna know what it was, it was a fire breathing dragon with teeth as sharp as sharks…
Sis i shouted there’s a dragon when she saw the dragon her face went purple. All of a sudden the dragon took a big bite out of the sky-ship, we went shutting down. My sis shouted ahhh I shouted stop being a baby while we were shutting down.
Crash we landed, but the weird thing was we landed in our backyard where our parents came and asked if we were ok. I told them I was ok and my sister gave me a glance and said yeah I’m fine she said it with sarcasm.
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This piece of work is great. Maybe you could check your spaces and punctuation.
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