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The Weeping Willow

The Weeping Willow’s luscious leather leaves,

Hung like a roost of blood-sucking bats,

Clinging to a crocked cavern  crumbling like mouth-watering cake,

Swaying in the wandering wind like a ship being tossed in a stormy sea.

 

The Weeping Willow’s towering trunk,

Stood tall and proud like a mountain in the Himalayas,

Its chocolate coloured bark engraved like a hidden map,

Waiting to be revealed by the greatest explorers.

 

The Weeping Willow’s blossoming branches,

Bow down like climbing cobras waiting for prey,

Drooping like a flower without water,

Its tips brushing the ground as smooth as honey.

 

The Weeping Willow’s rough roots,

Snake down like vipers ready to ambush,

Tangled like a sea of noodles,

As thick as anacondas.

7 Responses to “The Weeping Willow”

  1. Hi Erin,
    I love your poem.
    I especially love the image of snakes in the final verse.
    What made you think of this?
    I wonder if you could have referenced Medusa here at all?
    Mrs. Hinks

  2. Hi Erin,

    I love your poem, the adjectives that you used and you really brought the reader in!
    You really described The Weeping Willow it is amazing!!

    Issy

  3. Great poem Erin!
    I love the way you describe everything in such detail.

    Lexi

  4. Hi Erin
    I love your poem, especially “Clinging to a crocked cavern crumbling like mouth-watering cake”.

  5. Hi Erin I hope you are ok!! I loved your poem it is so powerful! I especially liked this verse:

    The Weeping Willow’s towering trunk,

    Stood tall and proud like a mountain in the Himalayas,

    Its chocolate coloured bark engraved like a hidden map,

    Waiting to be revealed by the greatest explorers.

    How did you come up with these ideas??

  6. I like the alliteration of the name ‘weeping willow’. how did you think of the name?. something to improve on is maybe change Anaconda or cobra as there are to snakes you could say as thick as a village of mountains.

  7. This is a powerful and imaginative poem Erin, well done. I think the description of the tree trunk is particularly effective, as well as the image of ‘the vipers ready to ambush’ in the final verse.

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